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Buster
08-01-2006, 02:10 PM
Well Im trying to get in to the whole fan fic. thing so I was thinking about TAO. And he is what I got. This is just the intro, and well I was woundering what you guys thought of it. If you guys like it I may write some more... and if you dont... I may still write some more...

So Here you go:


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Tactics Arena - Oblivion
A new War.
By Buster.

Prologue:

The darkness. I haven’t seen the light, in what seems like a eon. The war may have only started three months ago, but the murder, the chaos, have made this war 100 fold what it should have been. Everyone has been hurt, and no one is happy. Even the Dark Lord Sin, a Cleric, that used his powers to start this war, can not see joy in this.

I am one of the last survivors of my unit. I am one of the finest riders from the beast riders column. My unit and I were walking along a water bank when we were jumped by a Black Knight riding a dragon. The dragon was no normal dragon though. No dragon could be that strong. It was a golden dragon, most likely because of the Dark Lord Sin, and that beast had the power to wipe out my whole unit in one attack. If it had not been for the Barrier Wards, engineered at the beginning of the war, I would have been killed and so would what is left of my unit.

My unit is made up of seven other beast riders, twelve assassins, five pyromancers, six archers, two that were trained to be scouts, and nine knights. I would love to say we are all in great shape, but we are not. Most of our beasts are injured, there are only two that can still run at top speeds. Our assassins have become angry at the knights for slowing us down, and are now blaming them for us being attacked. The pyromancers are mad at the archers and scouts for moving out too far and not defending the magic units, such as our golems, dark witches, and pyromancers. The scouts are off by themselves. And finally our knights' weapons are breaking. We had a unit of over 200 men and women, but now we are down to 39. The men have named me there leader. Sadly, I do not know how to lead them. I know that the right thing for Tremanioc is to fight. But the right thing for my men would be to flee from battle.

Tremanioc, our homeland, is lead by the great lord Numen. Our king, lord Numen, has asked upon us to go to Sendia, where the enemy is said to be attacking soon. But will this small unit of 39 warriors really help in the battle? Can the light of hope prostrate the lucent of darkness?

Series 1: The Age of War
Chapter 1: The Journey to Sendia.

Me and my man have been traveling now for 112 days. We where one of the first units to be sent out in to battle, but besides the confrontation at the water bank, we have only been in one battle. We had just moved out of the village of the Scouts, Montañas Rocosas, when we were ambushed. The unit was lead by the same Black Knight that had attacked us on the water bank. The battle last a few days, we fought with all we had, and only lost a few men in the battle, a Furgon, that had joined us when we were walk though the heavily wooded land of Huron, two assassins, both who used explosives to destroy three Stone Golems, 2 Mud Golems and four other beast we had never seen before, and one knight, this knight was killed by a dragon at the start of this battle.

On day 106 was the day we where attack at the water bank. That day was the worst day of this whole war. We where in Terre De l'Eau and this of one of the first good days we had in some time. The sun was high and the sky were pure, that is until we crossed over a hill to be assaulted by that golden dragon. This dragon was five times the normal size of those tyrants. Its wings reached out over 300 feet, and it was lacking out fire with every breath. My unit fought with all there might, even though they knew they would never get past this battle. It looked as if we had defeated the beast, our unit had forced the dragon back to a corner, but then that beast released a meteor of a fire blast. The flare itself burnt many men to death, but for the men that had the blast hit them were killed without thought. What is left of my man had been behind a barrier ward, and one brave knight activated it. Sadly that knight was kill a moment later by the Black Knights blade. If it had not been for a scout that had one arrow, that had not been burnt from the dragon, and was outside of the barrier shot the dragon right in the eye. The dragon flow off in a fiery rage. We tried to nurse that scout, but he died about an hour later.

Now we are on an open road that leads Sendia.

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Thanks to KBHoleN1 for the Proofread
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KBHoleN1
08-01-2006, 02:15 PM
Sounds interesting, but I'm not going to read it with a grammar and/or spelling mistake in almost every line. I'm not picking on you, but if someone doesn't have the time to proofread (or ask someone who's good at it to do it for them), then I don't think others should be expected to read it and give feedback.

Buster
08-01-2006, 02:17 PM
Ok, I will go and Fix those errors

The Pirate
08-01-2006, 02:22 PM
Ok, I will go and Fix those errors

You forgot a period at the end of your sentence. If you want help, I am offering.

Toledo 13
08-01-2006, 02:30 PM
Grammatical errors aside... it's pretty neat. But... why is the dark lord a cleric...?:dry:

Lucien Lachance
08-01-2006, 02:35 PM
I beat you to the punch of using Oblivion in Tao, hense my username and clan. :) However the game itself is really run. :bigsmile:

Buster
08-01-2006, 02:37 PM
KBHoleN1, has Proof Read it and I thank him.

The Dark Lord is a Cleric, that has found the true power of light, which ended up being darkness.

He used that power and started this war.

Thank you all for the feed back.

Toledo 13
08-01-2006, 02:39 PM
KBHoleN1, has Proof Read it and I thank him.

The Dark Lord is a Cleric, at has found the true power of light, which ended up being darkness.

He used that power and started this war.

Than you all for the feed back.

The true power of light...is darkness...

So... if a knight finds the true power of strength, will it be weakness?

Lucien Lachance
08-01-2006, 02:39 PM
KBHoleN1, has Proof Read it and I thank him.

The Dark Lord is a Cleric, at has found the true power of light, which ended up being darkness.

He used that power and started this war.

Than you all for the feed back.

Type slower and read it over once you've finished it...

Buster
08-01-2006, 02:49 PM
The true power of light...is darkness...

So... if a knight finds the true power of strength, will it be weakness?

Well No.

See Darkness is what humans made of it.

Look at the whole witch v. witchine(sp?) thing. Witchines used herbs and other ways to heal people, but Witch were the ladys of the devil.

Also If a human has to much power that power becomes darkenss. So Demi... is both light and dark.... you see?

_________

(PS: If you really look at true power of strength... The weaker the better... Its weird....)

Toledo 13
08-01-2006, 02:52 PM
Well No.

See Darkness is what humans made of it.

Look at the whole witch v. witchine(sp?) thing. Witchines used herbs and other ways to heal people, but Witch were the ladys of the devil.

Also If a human has to much power that power becomes darkenss. So Demi... is both light and dark.... you see?

_________

(PS: If you really look at true power of strength... The weaker the better... Its weird....)


not really..?

Buster
08-01-2006, 03:22 PM
Well kinda,

If you force on power, you will have no strength, but If you force on mind, which will make you weaker, you will have more strength.

You have to think on a higher level. XD

deleryn
08-01-2006, 03:38 PM
Hrmm.

Maybe I'll write a fan fiction to rival yours. :p

Anyone want to work for me in the artistry department?

Edit- Nvm. I'll take care of buisness outside of your thread, I suppose.

Buster
08-01-2006, 03:47 PM
lol XD

did you read it?

deleryn
08-01-2006, 03:52 PM
Yeah, but it only made me think that I could do better if I gave some time to it. Second thoughts make me doubt that. A lot of things seem that way that aren't actually true.

Want to write from opposite sides? You know, one authors the good guys, the other evil. Back and forth for a while. Of course, "good" and "evil" could just be replaced by "opposing", if you like.

Buster
08-01-2006, 03:58 PM
sure but for now, I want to work on this.

deleryn
08-01-2006, 04:02 PM
Well, now that I think about it, you involve the "light" and "darkness" a little bit to ambigously for my tastes. I'd be a struggle to carry on in the same style, I think.

Guess I'll write my own anyways. But we could always pull a crossover/switch. :D

Buster
08-02-2006, 09:53 AM
Yeah I guess thats ok.

Update: Added

Series 1: The Age of War
Chapter 1: The Journey to Sendia.

shatterstar
08-02-2006, 10:08 AM
hmm...i like it. more importantly, its got me wanting to write my own. lessee if i can generate the motivation this weekend.

Buster
08-02-2006, 10:13 AM
Its weird.... After you start.... You want to write more... and well... Besides that thing that some one was making about a TAO (I stilll havent read that... T_T) this is one of the first for TAO I think....

Edit: I found that thing http://tao.hanamifx.com/ <--- I still dont know who made that... T_T