Homework help

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Hi.

I was wondering if anyone would like to help people with

homework. Anyone can help. As example: you have to write

something and you're are not sure if it's right, you can put in

this thread explain us what you think is wrong and we all try

to help as good as we can.

Well i am from Croatien and i live in Denmark, i would like a

little help with this English work i did.



Oliver is a sixteen-year-old boy, who is very concerned with

having the right friends, more then being good in school. If

you have the right friends, he thinks, you are also popular.

Defiantly if it is a girl you are together with. In Oliver’s

opinion you learn more from that. You can learn about your

own and others feelings, and you can learn, what it would

say to be an adult.

Jennifer is the name of the girl, his together with. She looks

good and she’s also smart. Oliver is very proud and can’t

stop bragging. Oliver learns much from the relationship with

Jennifer, and transforms to a mature person, who can clear

conflicts/ problems. Therefore he can’t understand, that his

parents are complaining about, him spending all his time

with Jennifer instead of homework. Oliver means that when you are sixteen, you have the responsibility for you’re own

actions. And you can’t learn that from books or arguing.



I need help with the grammar.


Thanks.

NS

[Wizzy`]

Why dont you just put it into word?

[Snork]

Why dont you just put it into word?

Because he knows you're really smart, and he's hoping you can give him your legendary advice.

[uniquinous]

Wow you are so new...

I can give you the url of a pricey online homework help site...
which I work for and will get money for... >.>

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Oliver is a sixteen-year-old boy who is very concerned with

having the right friends more than being good in school. If

you have the right friends, he thinks, you are also popular.

Definately if it's a girl you're friends with. In Olivers

opinion, you learn more from that. You can learn about your feelings your friends feelings, and you can learn (what it would

say to be an adult.[Not sure what you meant to say by this, but it sticks out like a sore thumb])

Jennifer is the girl he is together with. She looks

good and she’s smart. Oliver is very proud and can’t

stop bragging. Oliver learns a lot from his relationship with

Jennifer, and grows into a more mature person, who can resolve

conflicts/problems. Therefore he can’t understand why his

parents are complaining about him spending all his time

with Jennifer instead of homework. Oliver understands that when you are sixteen, you have the responsibility for your own

actions. And you can’t learn that from books or arguing. --> Add something here, like, "Some lessons in life must be learned through livng, and not from books.


I hope I didn't change too much from the original story.

Also keep in mind that Im not the perfect grammar person, but I did take a few English classes in college, and I did retain some of that information.

[Jaymee_]

Hi.

I was wondering if anyone would like to help people with

homework. Anyone can help. As example: you have to write

something and you're are not sure if it's right, you can put in

this thread explain us what you think is wrong and we all try

to help as good as we can.

Well i am from Croatien and i live in Denmark, i would like a

little help with this English work i did.



Oliver is a sixteen-year-old boy, who is very concerned with

having the right friends, more then being good in school. If

you have the right friends, he thinks, you are also popular.

Defiantly if it is a girl you are together with. In Oliver’s

opinion you learn more from that. You can learn about your

own and others feelings, and you can learn, what it would

say to be an adult.

Jennifer is the name of the girl, his together with. She looks

good and she’s also smart. Oliver is very proud and can’t

stop bragging. Oliver learns much from the relationship with

Jennifer, and transforms to a mature person, who can clear

conflicts/ problems. Therefore he can’t understand, that his

parents are complaining about, him spending all his time

with Jennifer instead of homework. Oliver means that when you are sixteen, you have the responsibility for you’re own

actions. And you can’t learn that from books or arguing.



I need help with the grammar.


Thanks.

NS

Not sure if this is what your looking for but here is my stab at it:



Oliver is a sixteen year old boy who is more concerned with having the right friends then being good in school. He thinks that if you have the right friends, you will be popular. More so if you have a girlfriend.

Oliver feels that you will learn more from a romantic relationship, then a regular friendship. He can learn about his own feelings and that of the girl. He also thinks it will prepare him to be an adult.

Olivers girlfriend is named Jennifer. She is beautiful and smart. Oliver is very proud to be with her and can't help himself from bragging about her. He learns a lot from the relationship with Jennifer and transforms to a mature person who can work through his problems. Oliver does not understand, therefore, why his parents are complaining about him spending all of his time with his girlfriend instead of doing his school work. He feels like he is sixteen years old and responsible for his own actions and his parents should but out. You can't learn life experience from books.

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Thanks... i like both of them.

And sure Uniq

[shatterstar]

i dont know if its funnier that he asked a question on grammer, actually got answers or wizzy gave him the smart solution.

[mushroom_girl]

Snork does homework for the reward of cookies, milk, and a contract to work in his movies. :p

[Snork]

Snork does homework for the reward of cookies, milk, and a contract to work in his movies. :p

Everybody's got a price. :D

[Wizzy`]

wizzy gave him the smart solution.

:cool:

[Mr. LeGenD]

Oliver is a sixteen-year-old boy who is very concerned with

having the right friends more than being good in school. If

you have the right friends, he thinks, you are also popular.

Definately if it's a girl you're friends with. In Olivers

opinion, you learn more from that. You can learn about your feelings your friends feelings, and you can learn (what it would

say to be an adult.[Not sure what you meant to say by this, but it sticks out like a sore thumb])

Jennifer is the girl he is together with. She looks

good and she’s smart. Oliver is very proud and can’t

stop bragging. Oliver learns a lot from his relationship with

Jennifer, and grows into a more mature person, who can resolve

conflicts/problems. Therefore he can’t understand why his

parents are complaining about him spending all his time

with Jennifer instead of homework. Oliver understands that when you are sixteen, you have the responsibility for your own

actions. And you can’t learn that from books or arguing. --> Add something here, like, "Some lessons in life must be learned through livng, and not from books.


I hope I didn't change too much from the original story.

Also keep in mind that Im not the perfect grammar person, but I did take a few English classes in college, and I did retain some of that information.



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