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[Megaron]

Things you wouldn’t tell your mother

Summery
The article is about any, privacy on the internet. The main issue in the article is that millions of people have information about them self’s on the internet. Here we are talking about sites such as MySpace, Friendster and Face book. If you do not have experience with the computer, internet or dating chat sites, then you could get surprised of what things you can read about people, you could read about their spare time and even about their sexual orientation. In dating sites there can be false profiles with false pictures and false details about them self. The person with the ability to just search on the net, can make a false profile! Then try to image how many people around the world are in capable to do it?
Commentary
It’s kind of funny what people can do on the internet. What Col does in his profile is that he is very open to people on the dating sites. The profile shows what kind of person he is, which is good, and because of that, it might give him some associations with people like himself. I think it´s great that he is open to people, I disagree with the things he is writing, maybe because we aren’t the same type? Let us say that he didn’t write all the stuff, and just pretended to be a normal guy who accepted and wrote with anyone. Then perhaps he wouldn’t find the type he wanted to write with? But then again it is the internet and there aren’t any penalties writing it. The reason why I don’t agree with the man because I don’t think he consider about the consequences what he is doing, especially when he is mentioning he is doing drugs.
Once I had a dating account on a site called arto. It is place where younglings are chatting. The site is meant to be for teenagers. The good thing with the site is that everyone who has an account is from my place. The side is 95 percent safe. It means that almost every account is real and not fake. The rest is made by those who have false pictures (the losers). What I am trying to say is, that it is a good thing to trust on the dating site before accepting their terms to create an account.







Discussion
The internet is huge place. Almost its own world! Bad things and good things can be found, and that depends on what you are looking for. And as in the text, almost anything on the internet is socially accepted as an example we can take Col. The world have gone so bad that guys like him creates dating profiles, and in a hope to find people that matches. It’s okay to be accepted by humans no matter what kind of problem you have. But what I don’t accept is, instead of Inform others of using drugs then try to stop it, what’s the cool thing to be on drugs?
Another big issue is that you can’t really trust on the one you’re chatting with! Several dating sites have a high percentage of fake profiles posted. Many users are not aware that the person writing love letters to them through dating sites is not always what he/she appears to be. The fake profiles are probably made only for one thing: to cheat naive persons to send money to the person hiding behind a false name and picture. The excuses used are money for an airline ticket, hospital treatments and so on. The love-seeking men will never see their money again and surely never see the person they thought to be mailing with. The profiles are hiding behind fake pictures and who knows... often the beautiful young woman is in fact a man.



English aint my mother language, so if anyone could help me with some mistakes i have wrote, please tell me.

I know its much what i am asking for, but just to make it sound a little better, and more "english"

I need your help

Thanks

[KBHoleN1]

Things you wouldn’t tell your mother

Summary
The article is about any privacy on the internet. The main issue in the article is that millions of people have information about themselves on the internet, on sites such as MySpace, Friendster and Facebook. If you do not have experience with the computer, internet or dating chat sites, then you could be surprised by the things you can read about people, such as things they do in their spare time or even about their sexual orientation. On dating sites there can be false profiles with false pictures and false details about a person. Any person with the ability to search on the net can make a false profile! Then try to imagine how many people around the world have the capability!

Commentary
It’s kind of funny what people can do on the internet. Col is very open to people in his dating site profile. The profile shows what kind of person he is, which might give him some associations with people like himself. I think it's great that he is open to people, but I disagree with the things he is writing, maybe because we aren’t the same type of person? Let us say that he didn’t write all that stuff, and just pretended to be a normal guy who accepted and wrote with anyone. Then perhaps he wouldn’t find the type he wanted to write with? But then again it is the internet and there aren’t any penalties for writing it. The reason why I don’t agree with the man is because I don’t think he considers the consequences of what he is doing, especially when he mentions his drug use.

Once I had a dating account on a site called arto. It is place where youngsters are chatting. The site is meant to be for teenagers. The good thing about this site is that everyone who has an account is from my place. The site is 95 percent safe. It means that almost every account is real and contains genuine information. The rest is made by those who have false pictures (the losers). It is good to find a trustworthy dating site before accepting their terms and creating a profile.





Discussion
The internet is a huge place, almost its own world! Good and bad things can be found, depending on what you are looking for. As in the text, almost anything on the internet is socially accepted. Take Col for example. The world has gone so bad that guys like him create dating profiles in a hope to find people that match his personality. It’s okay to be accepted by humans no matter what kind of problem you have. But I feel that instead of informing others that you are using drugs, try to stop it. What’s the cool thing about being on drugs?

Another big issue is that you can’t really trust in the one you’re chatting with! Several dating sites have a high percentage of fake profiles posted. Many users are not aware that the person writing love letters to them through dating sites is not always what he/she appears to be. The fake profiles are probably made only for one thing: to cheat naive persons to send money to the person hiding behind a false name and picture. The excuses used are money for an airline ticket, hospital treatments and so on. The love-seeking man will never see their money again and surely never see the person they thought to be mailing with. The profiles are hiding behind fake pictures and who knows... often the beautiful young woman is in fact a man.

I tried not to change the language too much, so as not to change your meaning. I did have a couple spots where I was unsure what you meant, highlighted in red. Hope this helps, and if you'll clarify those parts I'll do that too. If anyone else wants to tweak things, feel free, not gonna hurt my feelings.

There you go, not everything is perfect, but it reads well. I do this for my roommate, whose first language is Tagalog, and I have found it is better to leave some non-standard English in the writing so that it sound more authentic to the writer. All the grammar is acceptable, just maybe not the best way of speaking.

[Megaron]

Yeah, its good to find a trustworthy site, thats what i meant


Thank you very much, that was very kind